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　　去美国留学，写好个人陈述也是很关键的一个部分，那么如何写好个人陈述呢？是不是需要找一些专业的机构进行设计和包装呢？和本站小编一起来看看德国留学个人陈述介绍。

　　一、学校介绍型

　　I am an undergraduatein…University ， the largest university anda cradle ofscientific and technological talents in China.

　　点评：该同学的个人陈述开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒据掉。

　　二、救世主型

　　I am a problemsolver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problemsbefore me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy， a voice fromPresident Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind， ＂Theworld can be changed by man＇s endeavor， …

　　点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹大牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。

　　三、重复简历型

　　I earned my Bachelorof Science degree in … Sciences with a specializationin … in 2002 at … university

　　点评：美国留学个人陈述不要去重复简历中的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。

　　四、抄袭句式型

　　As a student majoringin Computer Science， I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program.Indeed， having entered this splendid computer world， I am more than greedy forsomething new.

　　点评：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。

　　五、言幼稚型

　　＇Why the gecko canclimb on the wall while we can＇t-＇ ＇Why the leaves turn red in autumn＇ ＇Howmany stars are there in the sky-＇ When I was in childhood， I always kept askingmy mom all kinds of questions。I am especiallyinterested in how things work， I can even take apart things for several hoursin order to find out its principle.

　　点评：上来就回忆童年少年自己如何有着远大抱负，who cares。个人陈述字数有限，却用这么多话描述童年，没有任何意义。学校想知道你如何看待未来，而不是如何度过过去。

　　六、犹抱琵琶型

　　Making a rightdecision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present， Ihave come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decisionconcerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding ofoneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking，reviewing my life and analyzing my personality， I make the determination andchoose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize incommunications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

　　点评：重点放在自己要做重大决定上了，人生的转折点，然后来上句所谓名言警句。浪费字数，有限的字数里，同学们应该学会直接，并且抓住重点，突出自己最有优势的方面，最有特色的方面。

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